ValterValyun's movie Reviews on Newgrounds

[Banana]

You wanted a thorough critique; I'm giving you one. Any questions, respond it, and I'll respond back to your fourm post.

I almost had a hard time following the story, but at least I get it:

"Man walks on moon, man finds life, finds out alien life likes to listen music."

However, the visuals doesn't really strengthen that message across me very well.

What I would do in this case that I'd first introduce the astronaut, place his flag on the moon, and then walk around that he's finding life.

Then, instead of having that banana-alien walking, make him dancing to the music. Right now, he looks annoyed and bored to the music rather than enjoying it.

For the fade-in / out text, I recommend 3 seconds, and then fade. Longer than that makes the whole video boring already.

Artistic-wise, I'd suggest vary your line thickness on your drawings.

Walk-cycle of that alien was alright; could use work. The banana's body movement and face is jarring.

Kalixo responds:

Thank you, I will take your advice to heart, hopefully it'll help me improve as a artist.

[The Evolving World Part 4 (Full Episode)]

That's some professional-quality animation you got here! Movements are still jarring, and audio kept silencing a bit, but thoroughly enjoyed it!

Just wished I saw the first three parts; tried going through your link but it doesn't work.

You should upload them here instead.

LockedOnAnimations responds:

Thanks! I fixed the links, they should work now. :)

[Fefnir - Demo]

Was worried this video wasn't legit or you're just someone who posted someone else's video, but good thing I did my research.

Awesome trailer, professionally produced. Can't wait for it to come out!

FrameFreak2D responds:

Thanks a lot VLanimate, the pilot is already out :D I'm about to upload it now, we're looking for investors now, and to be honest we made a lot of mistakes with it since it was our first project of this kind, hopefully the 2016 will open some new opportunities for us :D

[Life Adversity, Loss, Forgiveness, And Love]

Too much use of text . . .

And I can't give respect to anyone who uses the generic, animation apps like GoAnimate or PowToon. Unless you couldn't afford Flash or any other software, I understand that, but you might not receive any big scores if you keep using it.

nathanboss03 responds:

Sorry, I don't have money for flash, and the text is to explain. But thanks for the info.

[Minecraft Eletronic Fail]

Sorry buddy, but Minecraft Gameplays are really frowned upon on NewGrounds.

Jcc0450 responds:

Yeah, I've noticed.
However I've decided to throw that out and just pull music out of my... Ah you get it. I've done something else.

[Ghost Buds]

Story's original and very comical; even liked the character designs of the ghost.

However, one thing that bugs me . . . why's half of the description different from the video? (i.e. "Along the way, they team up with a kind farmer and an egotistical llama to regain rightful control of an Incan empire.")

Fitzpresident responds:

It's a reference to my favorite Disney movie, Kung Fu Panda

[Punch on the oldman]

I like this loop; got a nice, fluid character animation going on here. I'd hate to see this blammed but the only thing I'd hate about this is that there's no sound. At least a few poking or punching sounds would do.

Kirzap responds:

Thx for the comment and yes, it would need some audio but actually is one of my first attempt on flash and tecnically is like an exercise in wich i missed some inbetweens and some timing too. On the other hand I was willing to share this experiment whit other people. :P