ValterValyun's movie Reviews on Newgrounds

[Banana]

You wanted a thorough critique; I'm giving you one. Any questions, respond it, and I'll respond back to your fourm post.

I almost had a hard time following the story, but at least I get it:

"Man walks on moon, man finds life, finds out alien life likes to listen music."

However, the visuals doesn't really strengthen that message across me very well.

What I would do in this case that I'd first introduce the astronaut, place his flag on the moon, and then walk around that he's finding life.

Then, instead of having that banana-alien walking, make him dancing to the music. Right now, he looks annoyed and bored to the music rather than enjoying it.

For the fade-in / out text, I recommend 3 seconds, and then fade. Longer than that makes the whole video boring already.

Artistic-wise, I'd suggest vary your line thickness on your drawings.

Walk-cycle of that alien was alright; could use work. The banana's body movement and face is jarring.

Kalixo responds:

Thank you, I will take your advice to heart, hopefully it'll help me improve as a artist.

[Sonic in Undertale Part 1 (REUPLOAD)]

If it was blammed, then probably your main reasons are that you need to improve drawings, and you need to work on your animations (lack of in-betweens and lack of character). I could try to nit-pick everything about it, but it would be beyond saving or have to consider redo the whole thing.

[The Evolving World Part 4 (Full Episode)]

That's some professional-quality animation you got here! Movements are still jarring, and audio kept silencing a bit, but thoroughly enjoyed it!

Just wished I saw the first three parts; tried going through your link but it doesn't work.

You should upload them here instead.

LockedOnAnimations responds:

Thanks! I fixed the links, they should work now. :)

[Awesome Nesscar - Video game addiction]

I dont want to sound off mean, but I'm going to give some constructive criticism on your animation.

First, the 2D part, it needs more in-betweens, so draw more frames so you can smooth out the animation.

The 3D part, the models do looked unfinished. Notice those lines that form your geometic shapes? It looks like you only took snapshots from your 3D software and didn't render them properly.

The camera could use more consistency. For example of those two guys on the couch when they keep switching lines, the camera abruptly switches position.

There's barely any animation for the models (lips dont count). Their bodies could use in-betweening like your 2D.

TL;DR -- This video is more of an animatic, not an animation; a slideshow of images rather than any character animation involved.

I'll at least give 1 star for effort.

[Fefnir - Demo]

Was worried this video wasn't legit or you're just someone who posted someone else's video, but good thing I did my research.

Awesome trailer, professionally produced. Can't wait for it to come out!

FrameFreak2D responds:

Thanks a lot VLanimate, the pilot is already out :D I'm about to upload it now, we're looking for investors now, and to be honest we made a lot of mistakes with it since it was our first project of this kind, hopefully the 2016 will open some new opportunities for us :D