ValterValyun's movie Reviews on Newgrounds

[Game Grumps Animated - Exposed]

It was alright. I agree with the reviewer under me, except about the Game Grumps part -- I don't mind fan animations.

Yes, animation is minimal, but you kept a bit alive by animating the boiling lines.

But I would prefer that you would try go for a fully animated, in-betweened animation if you want to get better.

So that's why I gave it a 3 because I want you to see do more.

Kalixo responds:

Thank you for your response, I will certainly try to put a lot more effort into creating a fully animated video, this was sort of a test run, but I'm glad it was OK :)

[Banana]

You wanted a thorough critique; I'm giving you one. Any questions, respond it, and I'll respond back to your fourm post.

I almost had a hard time following the story, but at least I get it:

"Man walks on moon, man finds life, finds out alien life likes to listen music."

However, the visuals doesn't really strengthen that message across me very well.

What I would do in this case that I'd first introduce the astronaut, place his flag on the moon, and then walk around that he's finding life.

Then, instead of having that banana-alien walking, make him dancing to the music. Right now, he looks annoyed and bored to the music rather than enjoying it.

For the fade-in / out text, I recommend 3 seconds, and then fade. Longer than that makes the whole video boring already.

Artistic-wise, I'd suggest vary your line thickness on your drawings.

Walk-cycle of that alien was alright; could use work. The banana's body movement and face is jarring.

Kalixo responds:

Thank you, I will take your advice to heart, hopefully it'll help me improve as a artist.

[Sonic in Undertale Part 1 (REUPLOAD)]

If it was blammed, then probably your main reasons are that you need to improve drawings, and you need to work on your animations (lack of in-betweens and lack of character). I could try to nit-pick everything about it, but it would be beyond saving or have to consider redo the whole thing.

[The Evolving World Part 4 (Full Episode)]

That's some professional-quality animation you got here! Movements are still jarring, and audio kept silencing a bit, but thoroughly enjoyed it!

Just wished I saw the first three parts; tried going through your link but it doesn't work.

You should upload them here instead.

LockedOnAnimations responds:

Thanks! I fixed the links, they should work now. :)

[Awesome Nesscar - The 3 Spirits]

Still okay, still going to say the same critique again, hence why I'm giving out less stars:

- more in-betweens; some parts looks too choppy
- drawings need to be polished
- lip-syncing's not syncing well to voices; ex. it's only random mouth shapes.

Which reminds me, if you really wanted to improve, how come you didn't ask for a better, thorough critique from the animation fourms? I've noticed you only post in the General fourms, which is a terrible idea imo.

[Fisheye Placebo: Hello World! Chapter 1 [English Dub]]

Visuals are great, story's great and all but I have one huge concern . . .

Did my little research on this manga . . . I found out Yuumei's the illustrator of this, but are you Yuumei herself, or did you and your friends just splashed your voices onto this video along with some editing?

Not that I'm trashing on the voice acting and the video edits, but I'm just concerned on the fact whether you had Yuumei's permission to post it here under your name.

WAConline responds:

I asked her. I mean our youtube channel is on my profile with her Permission.

She loved it. c:
We asked for her permission and credited her on All remarks.
It makes me feel honored that she gave us permission, We try our hardest to make the voices real as the characters.

Make sure to read the credits and opening for her name, She is our friend and we don't wanna seem like the "FineBros"

But the reason i'm posting it here is because Newgrounds has a cool, Dark, Chilling environment and I also wanna people to read Yuumei's comic work too.

[Awesome Nesscar - Time]

It seems you had taken my critique from your previous video (Maybe not?).

Lip-sync is slightly better, though it is a tad off.

Line work looks like it improve, still need polishing.

Would like to see more of your character move more than just lips. A nodded head, eyes blinking, or something subtle than just a frozen, static head.

Just another nit-picky thought: around the 3-second mark, I kinda feel uncomfortable with that shot that's cutting off half of his face. Just an opinion; not really a problem.

[Awesome Nesscar - Open your heart]

It's okay, but from what I saw from your profile, this is your best one yet.

Still would want to see your linework of your drawings to be more polished. And maybe work on your lip-sync as well because the lip shapes are not syncing to the song.

I'd also say to work on your character animation (and I mean have your character do more than just standing still with his lips moving) as well, but it seems you are not at your level yet.

[slenderman on roblox!?]

Nope; Newgrounds Moderation Team will take it down since it is a gameplay video, not an animation.

[Awesome Nesscar - Video game addiction]

I dont want to sound off mean, but I'm going to give some constructive criticism on your animation.

First, the 2D part, it needs more in-betweens, so draw more frames so you can smooth out the animation.

The 3D part, the models do looked unfinished. Notice those lines that form your geometic shapes? It looks like you only took snapshots from your 3D software and didn't render them properly.

The camera could use more consistency. For example of those two guys on the couch when they keep switching lines, the camera abruptly switches position.

There's barely any animation for the models (lips dont count). Their bodies could use in-betweening like your 2D.

TL;DR -- This video is more of an animatic, not an animation; a slideshow of images rather than any character animation involved.

I'll at least give 1 star for effort.